Elle Cosimano

Revision Advice From the Deep

I’m tired. It’s been a long day at the keyboard, and I think I have negative 342 words to show for it. So I’ll keep this short.

I call this segment “Revision Advice From My Six Year Old” — and I think it’s pretty damn brilliant.

Scene Opens with Mommy, head on kitchen table.

Thing 2:  Mom, are you tired?

Mom:  Yep.

Thing 2:  Are you sad?

Mom:  Maybe a little.

Thing 2:  [long pause] What did you do today?

Mom:  I worked on my book all day.

Thing 2:  Then why are you sad?

Mom:  [sigh] I made a lot of mistakes.

Thing 2:  [longer pause] You know, your computer is just like my DS. When I play Super Scribblenauts and I make a mistake, there’s a button I can push that makes the mistake go away.  And then I just fix it.  You can prob’ly do that on yours.

Mom:  [lifts head and smiles just a little]  Yeah?

Thing 2:  And you know what else?

Mom:  What?

Thing 2:  Sometimes, when I draw pictures of hard things — like Big Eye Tuna — I mess up the curvy part of the dorsal fin — that part’s really hard — and then it doesn’t look right.  So I use the eraser.  Sometimes if there’s no eraser left I just draw an X over it.  And if I run out of room for all the X’s, I just flip the paper over.

Mom:  Then what?

Thing 2:  Then I start again.  You can prob’ly do that too.

Mom:  So you’re telling me I should just keep fixing it until I get it right?

Thing 2:  Yep.  That’s just what you do.

Mom:  You know, you’re pretty smart, kid.

Thing 2:  [shrugs] I draw a lot of tunas.



Best Crit Group Ever
World’s Best Crit Group – and our tuna.


21, 2011 |

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4 Responses to “Revision Advice From the Deep”

  1. I am smiling so big! Kids are wonderful and so damn bright. I feel a little sad sometimes too. My kids also erase my woes.
    I’m only a keyboard tap away…or telephone. Remember, we’re all in the same boat, kettle of fish, crazy dang world…whatever.
    Hugs and a bouquet of erasers to you!

  2. Love this! And I *know* you’ll get that curvy part of the dorsal fin just right!

  3. Anji Estrellas says:

    This post made my day. What sage advice he gives us all. Thanks for sharing such a tender moment with your son Elle.

  4. D'Amanda Quadshot says:

    Thank you! i needed this.

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